Project name: QUENCH THE THIRST
Initial idea: A person pranks two friends which they blame on each other. It escalates. One of them dies.
Source of idea and importance: High school event where my friends and I were talking, but instead found celery thrown at our table. I went up with the celery in hand and went upstairs (because the lunch tables were on the lower floor) and threw it at the culprit's table before getting out of the area. My friends said that their reactions were great.
Desired experience/emotion evoked in audience: Amusement
Synopsis of story: Painter cleans out brush and grabs a cup of coffee. The painter's friend goes and drinks the painter's coffee, spits it out, and is unconscious. Now the painter and the painter's other friend have to go and find out what to do with the "dead" body.
Theme/Premise of piece discovered after finishing it: Don't take someone else's stuff or else you may be dragged all across school. Don't assume someone's dead by checking their pulse by placing their wrist to your ear.
Strengths in film: Angel's acting. Like holy cow, he was dragged all over school and still remained as a "dead" body. Some cut-ins like pouring the coffee cup or Angel spitting out his drink all over the table. Nice focus.
Problem areas: Awkward cut from around 1:00. Overacting was an issue. 1:39's composition where everything seems to be smack in the middle. Cut at 1:50, not even getting fully into the elevator. Plus the angle changes at that scene too. 2:47 camera shift? 2:53, people are on the left side, instead of the right side. Character placement at 3:50. 4:08, odd angle? Also overexposed in the background. Odd cut-in at 4:26
Suggestions: 1:39's awkwardness, shift the camera angle more left so we can see the door. Keep the angle consistent in 2;47. Maybe full front on the elevator so then there's a natural cut when the elevator door closes and opens? 2:53, allow the people to go to the left side if you want to keep the people on the left side.
Notes on learning process, discoveries, and frustrations: We wrote down what was going to be done, but didn't keep in mind about the types of shots we wanted. Also, note to future self, bring some artist tape so we know exactly where to place the camera the next time. Photograph where everything was.